Kia orana
welcome back to my blog for today
This term we have been learning to write narrative stories. The purpose of a narrative is to… First we had to do a plan for our story.
Then we had to write our narrative writing.
We had to include a Setting, 5 senses, Simile, Adjectives, Personification, Onomatopoeia.
One of my, favourite sentences is "I like having a shower. It feels nice and warm. I could have it all day."
One thing I could improve on is more language features
I could almost hear these character voices in my head Taurae,telling me your story.
ReplyDeleteWell done on the use of punctuation.It made your learning easy to read.
I did notice that you have 2 paragraphs the same and in the fourth box,there are a couple of letters missing off the end of some words.
Just thought I'd point it out :)
Have a wonderful week and take care.
Thank you Mrs Cassidy for noticing I scram shoot it and I think I forgot to do the whole thing. Thanks for commenting on my blog I appease it thank you.
ReplyDeleteHello Taurae, I really liked our story about Spongebob. Thanks for sharing your amazing story. Ciao!
ReplyDeleteKia ora Taurae,
ReplyDeleteI like the story and I could hear them speaking in my head,my favourite sentence in your story was "In the bright beautiful morning" because it is very describing.Have a Great Day!